Friday, May 04, 2007

Peer review -- Emily's summary

Emily's summary

A young man was getting ready to graduate from college. He wanted a sport car for his graduation present. But, in the morning of his graduation, his father gave him a leather-bound Bible. He was very angry and leave his home. After many years, he was success in his business and had a great family. While he wanted go back to see his father, a telegram told him his father was dead. When he went back to his home, he found the Bible and watch the verse by his father. Then, a car key dropped from the Bible, and it had a tag with the date of his graduation.



1. What do you like best about your peer's summary?
Emily's summary is quite clear and the sentences are easy to understand.

2. Is it clear what is being summarized?
Yes, Emily lists all important points of this story.

3. Is the thesis of the original essay clear in the summary?
Yes, it is very clear.
I can know the happened time and what was happened very clear from this sentence: "He wanted a sport car for his graduation present. But, in the morning of his graduation, his father gave him a leather-bound Bible."

4. If you have read the original source, did you identify the same thesis?
Yes, she follows the original thesis.

5. Did your peer miss any key points from his or her summary?
No, I think Emily didn't miss any key points.

6. Did your peer include any of his own opinions in his or her summary?
No, Emily just wrote the summary of this story and she did not write her opinion.

7. Did your peer include any unimportant details in his or her summary?
No, it is quite brief and clear.

8. Were any points in the summary lost?
No, I don't think so.

Tuesday, May 01, 2007

Summary 2 -- A Full Box of Kisses

A man was very angry because his daughter decorated a box with gold wrapping paper when money was tight. Next morning, the man was embarrassed by his earlier overreaction after his daughter brought the gift to him. However, a man was angry again due to the empty box. Nevertheless, it was a box which filled of her blowing kisses, his daughter said. This man kept the box for many years when he was discouraged because it is a love from his child. The most precious possession for human is the gold container filled with love and kisses form our children, friends, family and God.

Summary -- the Graduation Present

A young man wished his father would purchase a sports car to him on his Graduation Day. However, this young man’s father just said something to him than gave him a Bible. A young man got angry so stormed out the house and didn’t come back until he knew that his father had passed away. After that, this young man came home because he needed to take care of things that his father left. With sadness and regret, he found out the Bible than opened it. His father had underlined the verse and finally the young man found the sport car’s key dropped from the back of the Bible.